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Post by andrew on Apr 25, 2014 14:06:19 GMT -5
This is my first story, by the way. Liked a lot to read both the comics and prose on the main site. Suddenly i felt the need of put on writing some argument i was thinking, but i always have been uneasy with the idea of tangling with characters very elaborated, like Niklas himself or Fabian, or the set of stories about Jonathon (it has a very powerful argument and a lot of potential of developement). For that reason, decided to develop this first argument without main characters. Don't like to call Davy Caulfield a secondary character; its my opinion that he's just kinda underdeveloped, and has a lot of potential and adaptability for new writers. Synopsis Chp. 1: Davy's creativity got him on trouble after a clumsy attempt of shining on school , and gets on a though spot for his popularity when its forced to help someone he doesn't like. Thinking and preparing a sleepover on his treehouse, meditate on past events, who will have violent and unexpected consequences for his present. Synopsis Chp. 2: The day after Davy's sleepover, he receives to his new homework mate on home, and now he will have to get in deep on his sorrowed mind and weird behavior to choose if he's worth of his time and effort. And to face once again his inner fears and outer demons in order to bring peace and balance to his new homework mate and, mainly, himself. Synopsis Chp. 3: School day arrives, and Davy returns to his class with a new friend. Now it's the time to show his teacher, and everybody else, if he really learned to do his homework properly, even if a nasty and evil third party tries to ruin it. An unsuspected ally will rise from the least expected place and now he will show everyone how the job gets done properly. Main canonical Character: Davy Caulfield Type of story: Non Scyfi, Lore-friendly (arguably) Non-canonical characters: yes Lenght: 11 pages. Letter size, Times news Romans font 12p. Format: .html Any doubt or comments i'll be happy of develop or correct if needed. Excuses beforehand, because english is not my native language for any mispelling what may have slipped trough. Edit: The title will be "A Perfect Homework", it's very fitting; moderators still have full permission for editing, adding or removing content. Edit 2 : Now the stories are onto Html version, compatible with any web browser I Consider that this tale is fully completed by itself, so, unless some modifications are requested, i will not add more chapters to it. Thank you all for reading, and waiting your comments, from the two last chapters, specially.
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Post by schneehase on Apr 25, 2014 15:51:54 GMT -5
Hi Andrew! Welcome along. I'm pleased to get to know another writer, and, I really hope you get along well here and we see your work grow I'm schneehase (snow hare), and I'm also a writer here, but I work along closer to the primary characters. I look forward to reading your work, but, I don't have anything on my ancient laptop to open a doc file. If you know what could, so I can see your story, help is welcomed! My first language is not English also, (German here), so if you don't understand me any time, say something
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Post by andrew on Apr 25, 2014 16:03:22 GMT -5
Hi Schneehase! thaks for the welcome. And for tell me about your issue, that's more common that you think XD. Updated the main thread with an html format, so should be viewed on any web browser. Ill look forward for your work too!, and any comments or suggestions are welcome.
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Post by eidan on Apr 25, 2014 21:20:42 GMT -5
Hola Andrew. Soy editor y uno de los dibujantes del sitio. Aunque hablo muchos idiomas, al igual que tu, mi idioma principal es el castellano. Empecé a hacer dibujos y cuentos para los lectores del sitio hace entre 10-15 años, pero la mayoría de personas no han visto mi trabajo hasta hace pocos años, ya que al principio sólo enseñaba mi trabajo a poca gente. Siendo editor y dibujante, puedo ayudarte con tus cuentos, pues desde que se enfermó el editor principal, he tomado su lugar en la mayoría de casos, para ayudar a la gente. Además Davy es amigo mío desde hace muchos años. El agregó su propia historia, y le simpatizó a Niklas, así que la incluyó. Talvez no sea una enciclopedia viviente sobre Davy, pero si tienes preguntas sobre él, y su personalidad, te puedo ayudar en lo que quieras. Actualmente es un maestro, y creo que está cerca de jubilarse, aunque no le he escrito en varios meses. Antes nos hablábamos todos los días, aunque últimamente sólo muy de vez en cuando. Te puedo ayudar con el cuento, ya que es parte de lo que hago en el sitio, aunque no he tenido tiempo de leerlo aún, porque estoy ayudando a ilustrar un cuento nuevo de Schneehase y estoy terminando un dibujo que le prometí. Me gusta tomar mi tiempo al leer los cuentos, para leerlos detenidamente, porque así te puedo ayudar mejor, pero le voy a hechar un vistazo tan pronto termine el dibujo que le prometí a Schneehase. Espero que te sientas bienvenido y que sepas que cuentas con toda la ayuda que quieras de parte mía y con la amistad de la comunidad en general.
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Post by andrew on Apr 25, 2014 21:42:55 GMT -5
Hola Eidan. Gracias por ofrecerme tu ayuda para entender mejor el universo de Niklas & Friends. Debo confesar que estaba planeando hacer una trilogía con su participación, teniendo como inicio este cuento. Y que además, su historia en el cómic se mie hizo bastante familiar, por ponerlo de algun modo, y por eso lo elegí a él como coprotagonista, además de que, como le dije a schneehase, no quería entrometerme demasiado en historias ya estructuradas. Por favor, si notas alguna inconsistencia manifiesta entre su personalidad y el cuento que pueda serle ofensiva, házmelo saber, ya que lo último que quiero hacer es ofender la honra o memoria de alguien. Por demás, huelga decir la frase archiconocida de disclaimer "los eventos y personajes de esta historia son..." creo que me entenderás al respecto. Curioso que menciones que actualmente es un maestro, ya que en lo que tengo planeado y lo que he escrito, la escuela es muy gravitante y, por lo general, los maestros son catalizadores importantes de los eventos, así que si crees que hay algo que Davy el maestro quisiera decirle al pequeño Davy, comunícamelo por PM y haré que lo sepa Gracias de antemano.
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Post by eidan on Apr 25, 2014 21:57:00 GMT -5
Está bien. Con todo gusto. Ahora termino el dibujo para Schneehase para no quedarle mal:)
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Post by anthony on May 5, 2014 10:25:12 GMT -5
Hi Andrew ! You've really got a talent to make people break their fingernails while reading your work ^^ . Dude, that small part was just awesome. Jan Novak... I see that You designed a character with Polish roots.. The part about walking around with freshly killed rabbits - Do we know each other !? (I was exactly like Jan when I was 13-14... A class weirdo with scary hobbies, such as gunsmithing, making explosives, and hunting 'small game'.) And those two friends of his.. You really presented an excellent example of sadistic Russian (as I could recognize by language they are using) kids...I've Used to know some similar guys to those two, but those I knew were even a bit more sadistic than your characters.. (they were torturing animals for fun and robbing cash and things from younger kids, not to mention the fact that they were taking drugs).
But, getting back to Your story, I really like the concept, And personally, I find your writing style awesome. Do you write books? You really know how to hold people in tension, Make them nervous about what is going to happen next..
I would really love to see the continuation.
If You would like my help in something, such as some advices about Languages (I'm Slavic, It's natural for me to understand Polish, Russian, Serbo-Croatian and similar), just send me a message. If You want, I can also give you some ideas about hunting, poaching, survival and such, Just send me a question.
With greetings, Anthony.
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Post by andrew on May 8, 2014 2:41:44 GMT -5
Hi, anthony. Nice to meet you. Thank you for your opinion about my tale! Glad you have liked! And thanks for offering your help onto understanding better the slavic culture. I'm actually writing some of my tale, but i'm always searching for ways of knowing more about the little details, ethics, customs, superstitions and manners. As i'm from South America, sometimes it's hard for me to get a credible picture or a psychological profile of slavic or centroeuropean people.
Effectively, Jan it's one of the mains of one of my tales. Maybe onto more time, on off topic section of the forum, i will publish some chapters, so you get a better idea about who is he. Also for the russian kids they have their own "issue". Sorry for the delay on answering you, but i was kinda obsessed with a continuation of the comic strip by Ravengrim, and what i believed it would be a short tale, resulted a almost full book. You will see.
I will look forward to ask you some questions via PM. I appreciate the offering of help, really.
Andrew.
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Post by eidan on May 18, 2014 0:35:44 GMT -5
As promised the 1st part of this story has been edited, and should soon be posted where it will be able to be viewed after approved, along with the 1st preliminary illustrations. Andrew I'll place a message with the specific link as soon as possible. Make sure to read your mails.
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Post by andrew on May 19, 2014 23:25:57 GMT -5
Chapter 2 of the tale on prototype stage added on the first post! The story keeps growing, and it's constantly being updated. Awaiting your comments
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Post by andrew on Jun 13, 2014 0:31:31 GMT -5
New and final chapter of "The Perfect Homework" added for you to review and comment. Thank you all.
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Post by eidan on Jun 13, 2014 1:20:05 GMT -5
will get right on it
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